Home is a name, a word, it is a strong one; stronger than magician ever spoke, or spirit ever answered to, in the strongest conjuration.
~Charles Dickens~
Penny, teddy bear in hand, stood in the hallway painted an industrial gray. Helen, the case worker, handed her the worn suitcase packed with clothing, issued to her by the state. Though 17 years old, Penny felt trepidation about her new family. John and Marsha, her adoptive parents walked up to her, eyes and hearts brimming with love. All that was left of their long journey to become a family, was their short car ride home.
What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.
This week: HOME
Thank you Lillie McFerrin for hosting FSF.
Rene, you of all people will appreciate my fiction is for My Mr. Impecable Only! A writing course I am going to continue and can’t online or publish anywhere.
I wish you could. I love your words….
Ok I just published my first and only publishable poem I ever wrote. It is to My Mr. Impeccable.
See my comments. As I said, I am in awe….Breathless.
Lovely story! I hope it works out.
It did. I know it did.
Very well done dear lady.
Always
Benjamin
Thank you my sweet B.
Always
Renee
Hope your hanging in there
I am darling. Hope you are too.
You know how it goes, I’m hanging in there
I know babe. I’m here if you need me.
Likewise
❤
Strong compelling beginning, now that you’ve got us all hooked….
Have a great evening Renee!
Happy you liked it. The story ended well. Or it might continue. Who knows?
Hope you had a great evening too.
Very sweet story!
Thanks love.
Her age and the teddy bear gives us insight and innocence…hopefully the searching on both sides is over!
It was over. It took her 17 years to find her family, but she’s finally home.
Beautiful job, Renee, as always. You’re good at capturing a lot in just a few sentences. I tried this, too.
HOME
Although Cristina didn’t realize it at first, Mark felt it the moment they made eye contact while in line to buy coffee at 7-11. Six months later, they were traveling cross country together when she felt it, too. It wasn’t about settling down and buying a place together. It wasn’t about accents and picking out colors for the walls. It didn’t matter what city they were in or what form of transportation they were on, as long as they were together.
La La,
Your story was perfect. Perfect!!! It brought tears to my eyes. It’s true, home is not a place in which a body dwells. It is a feeling of belonging. No matter where you are. As long as you are loved, you are home…..
Love, Renee
That was captivating, Renee. Loved it.
Thanks my sweet. xoxoxoxoxox
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Well done…initially I pictured a small girl but you quickly changed my perception. Sweet tale!
Thanks my dear. I’m glad you liked it. I figure, we all need a home and a teddy bear. No matter how old we are….
It, so often, doesn’t work out that way. I like it when it does.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/12/fsf-five-sentence-fiction-61413-home-pg/
There has to be some happy endings. Right Scott?
Yes, there does – even in our own lives.
❤
This was beautiful! 🙂
Thanks so much honey.
Very nice.
Thank you so much.
What a beautiful story!
Thanks my dear, so much.
Interesting, but devastating that at 17 she was still searching for her perfect family. Feels to me that she has finally found a loving home. Nicely done and I like the way you used the word prompt.
Barbara @ http://www.allmylivesnow.com
Thanks my dear for the comment. Some children never find their forever homes. I’m glad that my character Penny finally did. Doesn’t matter what age a child is, they need a family. We all do. Whether they’re blood or not. It doesn’t much matter.
Lovely – such a positive story.
Thanks sweetheart.