copyright–Lora Mitchell
Maggie came home and found Ian “on the nod”. He looked up at her, but couldn’t focus. The heroin he was on must be good.
“Mags my love,” he murmured.
“Don’t say a fucking word,” she scoffed.
All the happiness she felt before she walked through the door evaporated. Even with the rain, she had been elated. She had picked up groceries to make a sumptuous Easter meal. And a basket of lilies because their aroma reminded her of home. That’s where Maggie should be. With family. Not him. How could she love a man so bent on self destruction?
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Genre: Tragic Romance
Special thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for the latest Friday Fictioneers prompt. I had to write about my book characters, Maggie and Ian. I hope you like the story. It’s a bit darker than I’m used to writing. I thought it was appropriate for the prompt though. Have a great weekend my dear readers. Please know I take criticism as well as kudos for my stories. I’m no marshmallow. Bring it on.
Renee Writes Here 
It is a hard place for her. Great writing.
Yes, very difficult. She loves someone that’s falling apart. Thanks for the sweet words Deana. Can’t wait to read your entry.
Wow. My favorite so far. This is so well-written.
WOW! Thank you for the compliment.
Poignant. Beautiful take 🙂
Thank you. The heart wants what the heart wants. Even when it’s not good for us.
Don’t you wonder how many stay longer due to unknown reason than they should.
Of course I do Joe. I think that’s why the story came to me….
OK, once more. Your blog dropped my comment. Sigh.
I hope she finds it in her to leave and get on with her life. I think there are more people in this situation or one like it, than we realize, and they’re wasting so much time. Of course, easier said than done.
I chuckled at “on the nod”, which I previously have only seen used to describe winning a horse race when a horse wins because it’s reaching forward as it gets to the finish line and therefore its head gets across first.
Have a lovely weekend,.
janet
You’re right about the term on the nod. It is also used to describe someone on heroin. This story is something I hope to turn into a book. I’ve already written the ending and a couple of chapters. Need to find the time to fill in the gaps. need to stop making excuses.
Can’t wait to read your story.
Real emotions written here. Nice.
Thanks so much. I need to get my book written. I have to.
can’t wait to read your story.
I know what you’re saying I need to finish my book and I’m almost done and it would be finished if I would just write it. SMH
Life does get in the way sometimes. It most certainly does.
That’s a lot of story for so few words! Very nice.
Thanks so much. Want it to be my book. Soon.
Well, at least the flowers for the funeral have already showed up. She needs to move on. Ian has already chosen his path.
That’s so very true. But she loves him. It’s crazy what love can make us do.
We never know another’s demons fully. I remember one of my elders who only spoke freely when drunk. And then pretty much forgot what was said. You find out interesting things even if the words are slurred.
I am having fun writing and reading 100 word wonders. Cheers.
It is fun isn’t it? No we’ll never understand why people self medicate or choose not to feel. Sad isn’t it? Can’t wait to read your story….
I’ve also been playing 100 words outside of the prompt. Plus the two in this week, my own, plus a continuation of one Alastair and I are playing with.
Time for sleep now…
Great story. Wondering about the tense in the second line of the last paragraph? She’s walked in on Ian then the tense of the second sentence is different from that of the third. “Had been” elated rather than was (?), which to me read as the present tense.
I loved Ian’s line.
Denmother
I corrected the tense in the second line. You’re right, it was off. Ian’s line was ridiculous. Of course, he was high so what would you expect?
I appreciate your comment Denmother. Very much.
Enjoyed this – a situation that must be repeated in many households with drink or drugs as the cause. Well done.
Thank you Sandra. I agree. I’m sure it is something that is repeated in many households.
I see you’re a published author with Ether Books. Me too! I’m so excited about it.
Love, Renee
Yes, I’ve got a few stories there. Have you got the new android app? So far as I can tell you can’t sort the stories by author, which is a bit disappointing if you find one you like. Maybe I just haven’t gone into it closely enough. I’ll have a look out for yours.
I have an iPhone. My story should drop in about a week. It’s a paid download. Maybe because of the subject matter. Hmmmmm. Title is On a Hot Summer Night. I’ll look for your stories. 🙂
Dear Renee,
To say I enjoyed this piece would be a wrong choice. Better to say I appreciated it. 😉 It seems that Maggie’s just received a harsh dose of reality. Drop the lilies and run, sweetheart. This relationship is on a collision course to ruin. In other words, it will probably make for a good novel.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Dear Rochelle,
Have I told you how much I appreciate your comments? You make me feel like I’m on the right track with this writing thing. 🙂 I’m not sure she’ll drop the lilies and run. That Maggie, she’s a strong one though. She’ll figure out the right answer. I do hope it makes for a good novel. I pray it does.
Fondly,
Renee
She’s right, you know. She should go home. There’s no place to go with Ian but down.
Yes she should. But love is strong. Even for one as broken as Ian.
Pfft..been there done that, he has only one love.
Yes honey, you’re right. When she leaves, will it be his rock bottom? We’ll see.
Only if she is supplying his drugs, food, and shelter but probably not. He has a way to go. We all think that if we leave they will be so devastated they will straighten up. That’s ego and wishful thinking.
And it’s love too. Soon, you realize you have to love yourself more than the addict.
Yes, that’s the most important thing! Not just love but respect.
That’s a sad story, and the sentence “The heroin he was on must be good.” just hits like a metal fist. Very good tale (I hope)
Not sure how it will turn out yet. I’m glad you liked the sentence. I kinda did too.
Thanks for your comment Bjorn.
I haven’t read yours before. What a wonderful story!
I don’t always get to everyone’s, however, I will try yours in the future.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/03/13/friday-fictioneers-who-woulda-thought-genre-fiction-rated-pg13/
Thank you kind sir for your comment. I do appreciate it. I will be sure to read you in the future also.
Well, “Kind sir” deserves a thank you, wonderful lady.
🙂
Thanks. Giggle.
Takes me right into the scene and “speaks volumes” as I’m launched!
Your words are so incredibly kind. It’s what I was hoping to do for my reader. Thanks so much.
She’s got to ditch that loser! Good story Renee. 🙂
Will she or won’t she? Won’t know till my book is written. Me thinks Maggie is a smart one though. She’ll do what she can for as long as she can. I do believe she will.
Well-written, Renee. You characterize Ian with so few words. The girl as well. And your title is so perfect: she recognizes he is self-destructing, but in choosing to stay with him instead of going home, where (in her own words) she should have been, we see that she is self-destructing as well. There’s a lot of story here.
Thanks for your comments. Maggie and Ian are my book characters. I’m hoping that their stories will flow through my fingers and onto paper soon. I pray for it. I appreciate your words so much.
Hi how are you sweeteeeee
I’m good my dear. My first short story is being published through EtherBooks tomorrow. It’s a paid download and everything. I’ll be posting more details later tonight. So darn excited!
How are you?
i am fine and excellent to have published your work through Ether books
Congratulations
Love Ajay
Thanks my sweet man. Much love to you.
thank my dear
Beautiful writing, Renee. Seriously.
Thanks my dear. It’s going to be a book. I swear it is.
Good! It better be!
Thanks honey.
Dear Renee,
I loved your story. You can see what’s coming.
Shouldn’t it be ‘Even with the rain, ‘she’ had been elated.’ ?
Just wondering. Keep up the good work.
Aloha,
Doug
Dear Doug,
You’re right, I missed a word didn’t I?
Thanks for the kind comment. I do appreciate it. And yes, I do believe the story will not end happily.
Love, Renee
Happy ending or no, you’ve done a good job with this snippet.
Thanks much for your comment. I already know the ending. I wrote it already. Now to fill in the rest of the story….
Did you see the movie Trainspotting? Well written. Good luck with the book, and thanks for the follow.
I most certainly did. Great movie. Hear it’s a better book though. Thank YOU for the follow.
Heartbreaking. She needs to find a supportive therapist or therapy group to give her strength to leave him and get on with her life.
Yes she does. In my book she finds other ways to cope. Unfortunately.
There is a lot of fear there, which makes reading it a real experience. Fear of what he is descending to, why she is just letting it goon – I know,that ol; heart, and fear, too…of catching the self destruction bug, or virus…could happen to any of us…anytime…
Hello there my dear,
These two are the main characters in my novel. That I’m not writing. Grrrrrr. Maggie loves Ian. Ian is a drug addict. He loves Maggie, but loves the drugs more. Who knows what Maggie will do? Well, I know. But I’m not tellin’! Yet.